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Day One - Four | Preamble Debate

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1Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Wed Mar 23, 2011 10:38 pm

Chip

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Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Preamble

Day One - Preamble Proposals

Today, we're going to start proposing preambles. I have one written, if you have a proposal please post it below, or contribute to mine. Also, if you see mistakes, things you don't like, or anything else please post that as well.

Preamble

We the peoples of these United Sovereign Nations of the World have found that to protect our children, and our children’s children from the pain and sorrow of war, to reaffirm our belief and fait in human rights, in the dignity and importance of the human person, in the equal rights of men, women, children and of nations large and small, to establish conditions under which justice and equality can be maintained and prosper, and to promote social progress and better the lives of the coming generations, and raise the standards of the greater human freedom. And through these ends practice tolerance and live together in peace with one another as faithful and kind neighbors, unite in our universal strength to maintain inter-union and international peace and security, and to employ means to enhance the economic strength and power of our union’s nations and their peoples. Accordingly, our governments, by means of ambassadors, have gathered here in New Chandler City, New Chandler and have agreed to this Constitution of the United Sovereign Nations of the World and do hereby establish this union to be known as the United Sovereign Nations of the World.


Please post your thoughts below, the preamble will go to vote soon.



Last edited by Chip on Sun Mar 27, 2011 1:27 pm; edited 1 time in total

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2Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 1:39 am

Daniel

Daniel

Pretty good! Just two things:

1: I think it's "faith in human rights," not "fait in human rights," and

2: I believe the summit is in Cedar Bluffs, not New Chandler City.

3Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 1:43 am

Chip

Chip
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Thanks, I missed that mistake. And, you're right the summit is in Cedar Bluffs, but the constitution has to be ratified in New Chandler City at the Assembly headquarters, so that's the reason for that statement.

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4Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 12:59 pm

Guest


Guest

I think it's very nice Smile Here are my few alterations though:


We the peoples of these United Sovereign Nations of the World have found that to protect our children, and our children’s children from the pain and sorrow of war, to reaffirm our belief and fait in human rights, in the dignity and importance of the human person, in the equal rights of men, women, children and of nations large and small, to establish conditions under which justice and equality can be maintained and prosper, and to promote social progress and better the lives of the coming generations, and raise the standards of the greater human freedom. And through these ends practice tolerance and live together in peace with one another as faithful and kind neighbors, unite in our universal strength to maintain inter-union and international peace and security, as well with international peace and security internationally, and to employ means to enhance the economic strength and power of our union’s nations and their peoples. Accordingly, our governments, by means of ambassadors, have gathered here in the Assembly of Nations New Chandler City, New Chandler and have agreed to this Constitution of the United Sovereign Nations of the World and do hereby establish this union to be known as the United Sovereign Nations of the World.

5Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 2:27 pm

Daniel

Daniel

I like your alterations K50, sans strike-out. Smile

6Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 4:29 pm

Chip

Chip
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unite in our universal strength to maintain inter-union and international peace and security, [/b]as well with international peace and security internationally[/b]
That doesn't sound right Razz
in the Assembly of Nations New Chandler City, New Chandler

and I just don't like that Razz

what about ...gathered here in New Chandler City, New Chandler as the Assembly of Nations...
Also,
Constitution of the United Sovereign Nations of the World
is the name of the document, if you just say constitution... Razz and then you establish it as the United Sovereign Nations of the World, I think it sounds good.

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7Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 6:55 pm

Jon

Jon
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First Minister (Kaskaskia & Insulo)

This is the preamble I wrote for the COFR, slightly modified:


We the Nations of the United Soveriegn Nations of the World set forth to:
- Protect our children and our children's children from the horrors experienced in past conflicts that have done untold damage, destroyed countless lives and sodden with the tears of a billion mothers and fathers.
- Safegaurd the rights that have become commonplace in the free world, and shine the beaming light of freedom on the suppressed masses living under tyrants.
- Establish, Protect, and Spread the natural rights of Man and Woman to all inhabitants of the world, no mattter their race, religion, appearance, ideals, or livelihood.
- Push forward in and support the continual progress of humankind toward a more just and safe world where none is doomed to poverty or disease by the place of their birth, the choices of their forefathers, or the vengence of tyrants.
To achieve these ends we commit ourselves to:
- Extend the olive branch of peace to our neighbors, friend and foe, and use military force only when there is no other option and it is to the will of the common mass.
- Band together our collecive power to protect the defenseless and opressed of the earth from the blunted sword of tyranny.
- Create and accept common standards of the rights of man and woman in the free world, and work to spread them beyond our own borders.
- Use our togetherness in this union to promote the economic and social advancement of all peoples of the earth.
Therefore, to meet our ends and give means to our methods of meeting them, we representatives at the Assembly of Nations in New Chandler City, hereby bring into existence the United Soveriegn Nations of the World affirming these goals and methods as our mission.

8Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 8:14 pm

Guest


Guest

I agree with the edited version that K50 presented.

9Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 9:40 pm

Guest


Guest

I'm not sure about K50's version. It seems to just repeat things...

10Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Thu Mar 24, 2011 9:55 pm

Chip

Chip
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I just don't like it, I'm sorry. I won't vote for that version.

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11Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Fri Mar 25, 2011 2:05 am

Guest


Guest

Oh shoot I did repeat myself the first time Razz and between "Assembly of Nations New Chandler City" there should be an "in" or "of"

Sorry about that

12Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Sun Mar 27, 2011 5:32 am

Daniel

Daniel

Not sure if this is the right place to post this, but what happened to Day Two of the Constitutional Summit?

13Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Empty Re: Day One - Four | Preamble Debate Sun Mar 27, 2011 1:26 pm

Chip

Chip
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It's not exactly going to be day one day two thing it's going to be like day one through day four of debate then voting.

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